Red Part 9

I have a lot of issues with this page, so if you don't like self flagellation, you should stop reading here. To the critique:

  • Panel 1: The arrival of dawn works okay here. My bigger issue is that this may be too jarring after last page's climax. I should have devoted another page to sex. Shown them getting tired. Maybe ended with a wide view of the forest and a loud howl. That would have been a better transition into this page.
  • Panel 2: What? I like puffy nipples... Though I don't typically draw Roxy with them anymore.
  • Panel 3: I hate the artwork here. Far too flat and rushed.
  • Panel 4: Again rushed.
  • Panel 5: I fucked those eyes up baaaaad! 

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